Poetry Friday: Revision

February 1st, 2008

 I just have to share this today for Poetry Friday.  Yesterday, I talked about elaborating and trying out comparisons.  Jenna chose to revise a poem she wrote earlier this month.  I love this!

This is Jenna’s earlier poem: 

My dog-toy poodle
Black fur loves snow
Loves me licking my
Face like crazy            
–Jenna, 2nd grade

Revision:
Savannah

My dog
As black as night
wet nose
Cute smile
loves me  
licks my
face like crazy
Toy poodle
She loves me.
       –Jenna, 2nd grade
       January 31, 2008

Happy Poetry Friday.  Poetry Friday is here.
Happy reading.

msmac

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One Response to “Poetry Friday: Revision”

  1.   Karen Edmisten on February 1, 2008 4:09 pm

    So cute — good for her!

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