Poetry Friday: Revision

February 1, 2008

 I just have to share this today for Poetry Friday.  Yesterday, I talked about elaborating and trying out comparisons.  Jenna chose to revise a poem she wrote earlier this month.  I love this!

This is Jenna’s earlier poem: 

My dog-toy poodle
Black fur loves snow
Loves me licking my
Face like crazy            
–Jenna, 2nd grade

Revision:
Savannah

My dog
As black as night
wet nose
Cute smile
loves me  
licks my
face like crazy
Toy poodle
She loves me.
       –Jenna, 2nd grade
       January 31, 2008

Happy Poetry Friday.  Poetry Friday is here.
Happy reading.

msmac

Entry Filed under: Uncategorized. .

Create a free edublog to get your own comment avatar (and more!)

1 Comment Add your own

  • 1.    Karen Edmisten  |  February 1st, 2008 at 4:09 pm

    So cute — good for her!

Leave a comment

Required

Required, hidden

*
To prove you're a person (not a spam script), type the security word shown in the picture.
Anti-Spam Image

Some HTML allowed:
<a href="" title=""> <abbr title=""> <acronym title=""> <b> <blockquote cite=""> <cite> <code> <del datetime=""> <em> <i> <q cite=""> <strike> <strong>

Trackback this post  |  Subscribe to the comments via RSS Feed

Libraries should be the beating heart of the school, not mausoleums for dusty books." -Nonfiction Matters, Stephanie Harvey

Links

Subscribe by Email

Manage Your Subscriptions

Archives